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Afternoon Tea by RimaPichi Afternoon Tea by RimaPichi
Edit: OH GOD A DD Q//////Q Thank you so much!!! OMG Q//7//Q I don't even.. *goes wrtie a journal*QuQ

Oh my god i'm finally done @__@ it took me abour 2 weeks xD;;
It's an Art Trade with *MiiyukiChan
So many challenges @_@
But thanks to this pic my artblock s gone :'D
and damn i really dislike how it came out D: I need to work on my backgrounds, perspectives and my shading style Q_Q
But i worked really hard on it ;u; All the laces are hand made ;u;
The Plushies are random >.> only Hyde is a real character c: (you maybe know him from my "we can wait" picture xD but he was edited)
Sooo i would really appreciate critique >o< it's the only way to get better ;u;
I'm okay with harsh critique, i don't care if you say the whole picture is shit, i just need to know how to do it better ;u;
So yeah critique would be welcome and helpful >u<

Hope you like it ;A;

Yuki © *MiiyukiChan
Hyde © ~tantchen
Art by me *RimaPichi ;u;/

Sorry es sieht nich wirklich creepy aus D: ich wollte iwie das süsse und niedlcihe von Yuki iwie behalten und jetzt is es iwie.. einfach nich creepy xD hoffe s is trotzdem okay ;u; und kann dir noch nen helleren close up von Yuki schicken ;u;/
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Given 2013-01-12
Dreadful atmosphere, penetrating glares and evil smirks...something tells me this is not your average Afternoon Tea. *RimaPichi's piece will give you the shivers! ( Suggested by BlackyPinky and Featured by rydi1689 )
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Okay well first off, I will go into the format that I use at school to critique things.

Starting off with what I like. I really love how the Miiyuki's eyes are just so dazing and beautiful. I love how there is a theme of "elegant tea time" with the sense of crazy stuffed animals. I absolutely love the laces that where made here. they where done quite beautifully indeed.

Starting with the things I wonder you could do better on. I wonder for the table cloth, that on the surface area of the table, that it wouldn't be so flat. If you where to put a table cloth on a table, there would have creases and bubbles withing the cloth that had been place on the table. I would like to see some creases on the table area so that it wouldn't look so flat and tense like, also to add more shadows that are not only where the objects are placed. I wonder that if you could do better when fanning the table cloth out? like the edges and the corners, as you can see that not all the corers of the table would look straight and clean. some parts of the cloth would overlap them self's ex: [link] || [link].
the things that I said above would not only be for just the table, but the chairs too. I think the table tips could help with the chair as well. Oh also for the table and the chair I think that it would of been a great idea to use some sort of cloth texture to bring out the realistic taste of the table and the chair. The table and the chain just looks so plain with that pattern on there, and really doesn't give that much of realism. I would also suggest adding some texture to everything that's actually in this image too, but not the tea,spoons, knife's, etc. but things like the dolls, roses, napkins, cake, even the chair. that way it can give more sense of realism.
For the stuffed animals, I think that you could of added a bit more shadows in the areas that had scars and stitches etc. like for example that yellow/purple looking bunny by the window. that little scar or stitches? well because it's kind of hard to well what it really is, I would suggest to add shadows there to give it more of a "there is something there" without the shadow there, it's hard to tell if the stitches(of whatever it is ;u; ) are going into the stuffed animals skin or not? and also if there really is something there, or it's just the design of the thread. I would recommend this with the rest of the dolls as well. It's hard to tell about the stitches and cotton that comes out of it. I would suggest adding a bit more shadows there in the cotton area and the stitches. I also think that you could add more shadows on the dolls as well.
THe lighting. for the lighting...I actually think lacks balance(sorry if that's mean?) To me, the lighting is only lighting Miiyuki's area, but note really somewhat of the whole room. I can understand that maybe there are no lights in that room. but I can see that there is a window like area there behind one of those stuffed animals. and well there is only a type of glow coming from that window area, there is really no light bean shooting off the widow area and beaming at the table, the cake, the stuffed animals etc. it's just that I only see Miiyuki there, the one that's brightest, but doesn't really have no strong like light force shooting at her image.
The walls, for the walls, they look fine, but adding a little more wont hurt :) I would suggest adding little dots that look like it's dirty, other then just adding a type of texture there.
The chair. The chair is really nice and pretty. but if you get a closer look at it, it lacks depth. I think that you should put more shadows in the area's that have those bumps. and also add more creases around each bump so that the chair itself wont look so stiff. Examples: [link] || [link] || [link]

Onto Miiyuki ;A; // my gosh i'm sorry for this!! > A< //long critique ; A;
For the character Miiyuki, the side of the face that more far away from the window probably should have shadows to indicate that, that part of her face is not close to the light source. I think that you can add more shadows in some areas on the dress. like for example where her hand is by the plate, it's hard to see whether the arm and the dress is separated. Also, Miiyuki's hair looks too flow-y like. I understand that Miiyuki does have long hair, but it's not really windy like inside the room, and how her hair is made, makes it look like it is. and I do know that Miiyuki hair is really long, but still I think that Miiyuki's hair is actually straight? Also that Miiyuki hair looks flat. Meaning that it looks like she is laying back on the chair, when in actuality she is sitting up, I think that the hair should fall straight down.

that is all that I get to say for this ;u; sorry that it's long ORZ, I wanted to help you become a better artists, so I stared at this art for over and hours OTL I know that you have worked on this art so much and I can see that. and what you did here is truly magnificent :) but there is always room for improvements, and I would love to see that day that you do improve so much <3
you have done a magnificent job :) please keep up the great work and improve a lot <3 I hope that these critiques help you with the rest of your art in the future ;u;
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Rima!
I know you know that I just love your art c:
And I know how much it means to get feedback, becouse the only thing you want is to improve!

Well, let's start with how amazing this is! I've never seen such a full picture with such a background and details of you before! Amazing. And you have mut so much time in it! ;u;

Okay okay, The only thing that I have to say, is that the dots on her ears and chair look like they are just put there without thinking of the volume, you know? It doesn't look bad but it's something that I just noticed c: Also, I can't really see how the head of the front animal is placed, First I tought the stripe was an eye and that he winked but then I saw the ears that were placed that way, and the mouth then doesn't seem right.. But that could just be me ofcourse ;u;
Last thing, It seems like the cup the girl is holding, doesn't have the right perspective c:

Those were the only things I noticed and they are so small.. maybe I'm not even right!

I'm so sorry if I sound mean ;n; I just want to help you!

But, just.. This picture is amazing and I couldn't ever do it better♥
Keep going! Love your art ;v;

(I have no idea how to rate this daviation.. I barely know what they mean by impact and vision ;n;)
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M-A-F Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014
This is gorgeous, shading and detail is great!
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RimaPichi Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks so much QuQ
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Ariana-Olds Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   Traditional Artist
I love the little creatures
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RimaPichi Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thehe thanks >u<
<3
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Ariana-Olds Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013   Traditional Artist
your welcome Rima
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ReshiramMaster4evR98 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
are trades open already? btw, this is so cool even though it took 2 weeks!:D and im working on an easier one but looks hark and it took me 2 months already and im not yet done 8C
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RimaPichi Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nope sorry ;~;
Oh woah loth of patience you have xD
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ReshiramMaster4evR98 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Helloooo! on? XDDDDDDDDDDD
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crazy4anime09 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This looks amazing!!! I love the colors and details! :love: fav ^^
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RimaPichi Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks again Q7Q
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